Post-rain bit

juujika's picture

Is the description of Kasarah's response to being magically dried out after the rain too cheesy? I can't decide...

TCPancoast's picture

It didn't strike me as being

It didn't strike me as being terribly "Kasarah".

juujika's picture

I don't think that's the problem, so much.

She was soaked and miserable, and he fixed that. She's happy, she's grateful, and yeah, she's going to smile at him, and it gives him a warm fuzzy feeling. THAT'S what I'm trying to get across. I don't think that it is her response that is the problem, so much as the description of it.